Hunter Black Page 0519 – It’s Better This Way

I’m MUCH happier with this page. I’ve had my dialogue described both as my greatest strength and as one of my biggest areas of opportunity, so my feelings about it tend to be a little all over the place. But like all things in storytelling, dialogue should do at least one of two things; it has to either reveal character or advance story. I feel like we get a bit of both in this scene, so I feel like I’m on more solid ground. And for all of you that have been “disturbed” (probably too strong a word) by the furniture and the glassware in this scene, the extra mouths and eyeballs are all Will. My biggest contribution to all of this was making a dude into a throne on page 500. We can’t leave it alone now. It’s so CREEPY.

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